Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one’s ability
to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by
living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.
Travel has a significant role in cultivating the one, and no one can deny the essential value which travel can add to our life. The prompt states two of standpoints that some people see how travel is important in increasing our ability to relate to other people, and the others are not. I strongly agree with those people who believe in the crucial role of travel in our lives, and how the travel contribute to adding values as well as experience in our life for two reasons.
Firstly, let's imagine a tree of course trees don't move and don't change its place for millions of years, thus, do you think how many ones saw that tree, and how many different climates or weather could be exposed comparing to, such as a bird or animals which can migrate from place to place. Of course, the answer will show a big difference between the two situations. Therefore, if we applied that on two individuals; one of them never travelled or contact with the other globe, and another one used to travelling abroad frequently; surely, the individual who is travelling will gain plenty of knowledge as well experience as he will discover other world and will be sure that the there are other people live somewhere are completely different than him. This example explain to what extend travel contributes to increasing the one's ability to contact and relate to the others who maybe differ than him.
Further, Travel not only participate in enhancing the one's experience and making him relate to others but it also shares in increasing the awareness and his respect for the others who are different. For example, if someone never travelled outside his place; he will not able to understand that there are other people who are believing in and has another religion; but, that person who travelled to those people' countries surely has the experience and esteem to their beliefs. Such traveller people have great respect for all different cultures, races and thoughts. Travel helps in acquiring more cultures and experience in how to deal with who is differ from you and even how to respect what he braces.
In conclusion, if one needs to increase his ability to connect and relate with others who are differing from hin should travel to be able to see those people in their life and will discover how they are like us and as corollary will increase and enhance his ability to contact with them as well as his homage for their difference.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
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Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...live somewhere are completely different than him. This example explain to what exten...
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...erstand that there are other people who are believing in and has another religion; but, that ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'differed'.
Suggestion: differed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74644549763 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47711952806 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473933649289 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.3552315572 60.3974514979 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.916666667 118.986275619 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.1666666667 23.4991977007 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 5.21951772744 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353118856257 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141424193662 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826046302986 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228142261852 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288435345683 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.1392134831 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.8420337079 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.