Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility Write a response in wh

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Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Young people are future of nation and it is very important that they are shown right path in the childhood. Children admire many sports and movies stars because of their qualities and abilities. So, it should be the responsibility of such stars and celebrities to behave in such a way that they can become inspiration for young generation. In my opinion, I agree with prompt for below reasons.

The celebrities in the field of movie and sports are in current position because of the continuous support and encouragement that is provided by the society. So it is the great responsibility of those people to return the favor they have received in their carrier. By doing so, they can become inspirations for young people who watch them on television everyday. Lets say, a cricketer has provided shelter for homeless people, and children who watch this may be inspired from this and they will provide shelter for homeless when they become capable of earning money in future.

Celebrities should make sure that they are in focus always and their success is long lasting. If they want this to happen, they should help the society in which they are born and brought up. For instance, if a highly paid movie star commits a crime, he will not be casted in future movies, which means his success is lost and nobody will treat him as celebrity now instead he is treated as a criminal. This example clearly illustrates the necessity to have high moral and ethical standards for stars.

However, not all stars and celebrities have high moral and ethical standards. With lot of money in hands, some movie and sports stars we can expect them to behave in unscrupulous ways in many situations. In fact, the scandals and their profligate lifestyle is what keeps them in limelight. Although they are made heroes by their fans and admirers, once they reach the highest position in society, it is very difficult to change their behavior and mandating to develop characteristics that can be regarded as walking path for future generation.

The issue stated by prompt, is very argumentative. Some people believe that the success achieved by movie and sports are is not the real one, since this type of success is no use for society and people, except for the entertainment they provide. This is true in some sense. Their success does not fill hungry stomachs or provide a shelter for homeless people. So, considering these stars as role models does not benefit nation in any way. But, children who are interested in pursuing carriers in sports and entertainment industry can definitely take them as role models for their future. Thus, I state that stars definitely have responsibility to behave in a role model manner.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ung people who watch them on television everyday. Lets say, a cricketer has provided she...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... who watch them on television everyday. Lets say, a cricketer has provided shelter f...
^^^^
Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...en they become capable of earning money in future. Celebrities should make sure that t...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, thus, except for, for instance, in fact, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 460.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89565217391 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65908223575 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476086956522 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6481995864 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9130434783 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396242837509 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11114537115 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656036739165 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229507798231 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426742664709 0.0667264976115 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ung people who watch them on television everyday. Lets say, a cricketer has provided she...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... who watch them on television everyday. Lets say, a cricketer has provided shelter f...
^^^^
Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...en they become capable of earning money in future. Celebrities should make sure that t...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, thus, except for, for instance, in fact, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 460.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89565217391 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65908223575 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476086956522 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6481995864 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9130434783 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396242837509 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11114537115 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656036739165 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229507798231 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426742664709 0.0667264976115 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.