Sports stars movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility

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Sports stars & movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility

Sport stars and movie stars belong to a category which is generalized as showbiz i.e Show Business. Everything that these stars do is to influence other people in some or the other way.These people mostly belong to young or middle age group that act as role models for youngsters. I agree with the author that they should fulfill the societal responsibility.The only thing I would like to add is that these stars should always fulfill their part in society even without any monetary benefits.

Firstly,these stars are revered by many common people distributed across various age groups.Especially young minds which are very fickle in terms of their opinions are easily persuaded by these stars to promote their products.Their are a myriad of brands that perform various marketing campaigns with the help of superstars in their particular fields. For instance, a well known actor like Amitabh Bachchan was an ambassador for the Polio campaign in India wherein he acted as a medium to educate all the people of India including both the urban and the rural ones , on the importance of the polio vaccine, this created a huge wave of vaccination in India and further helped to eradicate Polio. These superstars have a very charming quality of influencing people on a grand scale, which if done for a good cause can surely help the society.

Secondly,nowadays due to the advent of social media and technology , anyone and everyone can be an influencer but to create a larger impact brands and companies pay millions of dollars to sport as well as movie stars to endorse things.As it is said that the fame is ephemeral i.e not everyone carries on his/her fame till eternity.The point being is that these actors religiously campaign for their endorsement otherwise that could be taken away from them . This creates a healthy competition between the stars as well as benefits the society in the same way.

However,looking up to the points made above ,I will say that all this endorsements should be done for a good cause otherwise they could prove to be detrimental to the society.As I stated above that young minds are fickle , they pick up bad things at a faster pace then good ones. For instance, if their favorite actor or sport personality endorses alcohol or tobacco they would think that these things are cool and will follow them .Hence both the cause and effect should be considered by an eminent personality before making any endorsement.

In conclusion,I will say that movie stars and sports personalities given the amount of fame also have a huge responsibility towards society which they should fulfill regardless of being paid millions of dollars.In the end , it is the upbringing and thinking of an individual which leads to the overall growth of the society .

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also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2313.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9849137931 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84271642416 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519396551724 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 23.0359550562 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.104847594 60.3974514979 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 210.272727273 118.986275619 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.1818181818 23.4991977007 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.21951772744 249% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 7.80617977528 372% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339351638963 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125520516039 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385155566924 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182902556653 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470415981178 0.0667264976115 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.1 14.1392134831 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 48.8420337079 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 12.1743820225 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.2143820225 168% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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