The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In order for a nation to be perceived as a great nation, I believe that the nation should have succeeded in both providing general welfare to its people and also has many representative people. Neither one of them could exceed the other criterion's importance and I believe that each criterion actually bolsters the other criterion to be augmented. The reasons why I maintain such claim are written below with further details.
First of all, the general welfare of the people should be the basic necessity that needs to be solved with the most priority. If a nation has failed in providing general welfare to its people, all they would worry would be about dearth and how they would survive until next year. Getting better education or becoming a civilized person is a whole new concern that does not bother them in their current situation. The government would also be obsessed with in providing enough food and everyday products for the people to survive well. However, we all know that for a nation to become great, the people who leads the nation or has the power to alter the nation such as rulers, artists, and scientists needs to bloom. When the people's only concern is about lack of food and worrying about diseases that are not lethal but has the potential to easily take them away, how can those who are born to make the nation a better country pursue with their dreams? Furthermore, even if the nation has presented many great people such as rulers, artists, and scientists, if the general people are suffering from lack of welfare, to have such great people would be no use.
I would like to show an example of the Renaissance era. The Renaissance era is known to be the best era where all the people lived with great welfare and many celebrated people were presented. They prospered in art, science, and in politics. The reason the world were able to have an era like Renaissance was because the general welfare of the people and the power of the celebrated people in making the nation a better country were harmonized.
To sum up, either one of the criteria that indicates a nation as a great nation, achievement of its rulers, artists, or scientists, and the general welfare of its people, can be a surer indicator. Both of the criteria should be met in order for a nation to prosper.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'criterions'' or 'criterion's'?
Suggestion: criterions'; criterion's
...ther one of them could exceed the other criterions importance and I believe that each crit...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68395061728 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46639848268 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437037037037 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2227711875 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5625 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3125 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219845000747 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779294361822 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713600440875 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151086333499 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355206253557 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.