The argument presented by the author outstrips the achievements of rulers, artists and scientists to welfare of the people as a beckon of consummate nation. Before delving deep into the position taken by the author one needs to know what makes a nation great? The development of a nation depends on several key elements such as education system, health care, social welfare, scientific research and leadership etc. These elements altogether, are considered to feed the growth of any nations. If a nation or its government is comprising with any of these elements than there are less likely chances for overall growth of a nation. Let us analyze the role of these factors.
First of all, the definition of a great nation has kept on changing over the last few decades. During medieval time, a nation was considered great if its people are not deprived of the basic needs of life viz food, shelter and clothing. But that perception has changed now. Instead, in contemporary times, a prosperous nation is the one which is able to provide the good quality of education, sanitation facilities, ample of job opportunities, internet, protection from invaders and ensure the human rights are not violated. In order to achieve all aforementioned facilities, a nation needs a great team from various backgrounds such as science, arts, politics. No single achievement by any of these can make a nation great. Consider for example, North Korea leader, Kim Jong-un, is putting the defense and nuclear programs ahead of the need of its people. One report has estimated that over 60% of the adolescents are suffering from malnutrition. Privation and oppression of people has led to fleeing the country itself. The dictum of tyrant leader is considered supreme and there are no courts to challenge him.
On the contrary, it can be argued that a nation would be able to utilize is resources in best and effective way if it has great leaders. But that belief is biased as there can be several loop holes in the process of choosing a leader and his intentions. For instance, there could be a leader who is indulged in corruption and has siphoned the taxpayer’s money for his welfare. In this case they might be a successful businessman but that does not depict the correct picture of growth of the nation.
Conclusively, it is not the accolade of one section- of the elements of growth- of the nation that makes a nation great rather its overall combined effort of all section that constitutes prosperity of a nation. It should be preferred to find a correct balance between public welfare and other elements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... scientists to welfare of the people as a beckon of consummate nation. Before delving de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93849658314 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81436716015 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533029612756 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1068366417 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5454545455 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9545454545 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230991031065 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604122332507 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606712230368 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140787026589 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565816392497 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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