Teacher's salary should be based on the academic performance of their students.
The writer of the issue states that the salary of teachers should be varied based on how much effort they put on their works. I can agree with this statement, but not completely. I have three main reasons why I am agreeing with this. And also I will argue why I am not completely agreeing with this issue.
The first reason why I am agreeing with this is that the teachers are encouraged to work harder for getting more money. Indeed, they know that if they put more effort on their work, they will get more reward of their work, hence; they teach their students more effectively.
The second reason is that the society could have better educational system. In fact, as I mentioned in the first reason the students are taught more precisely, therefore; the students could develop their skills more efficiently and in the future the educational system also could have better teachers. And this cycle will be continued forever.
The last reason why I agree is that the society can have better life in all aspects of life. As I argued in the second reason the educational system can prepare the students more skillfully for what they are trying to become. As a result, they could cause more progress in the society, and the society can have better economic system, so the life of the people will be better than it was before. If the society have better economic system, it will have better health and educational system. And also this cycle will be continued because the more efficient educational system can provide the society more safety and happier life.
However, there are some small problems related to this issue. How we can be able to determine how much is the academic performance of the students, and also there are some students who they do not want to progress, and regardless of how much effort their teachers spend on them, they do not develop their academic performance, so their teachers cannot do anything for progress of them. And the teacher is not paid more money because their students do not want to get better, and it is not fair for that teacher.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Different Words: 136 200 //you need to know more vocabulary words
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 365 350
No. of Characters: 1665 1500
No. of Different Words: 136 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.371 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.562 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.265 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.971 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...letely. I have three main reasons why I am agreeing with this. And also I will argue why I ...
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Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... this issue. The first reason why I am agreeing with this is that the teachers are enco...
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Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d this cycle will be continued forever. The last reason why I agree is that the ...
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Line 9, column 513, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r, and it is not fair for that teacher.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 58.6224719101 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70136986301 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35726320348 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9382653471 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.941176471 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181794127226 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579350128656 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896637362138 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107894826492 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798770490293 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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