Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
The passage says that recently making a good image became more important than the reality. It is true that people abruptly make a judgment based on the image through a person’s appearance or social media activities; however, a person’s true talents and characteristics matter eventually. I disagree with the statement and believe that even though making a good image of oneself is important, people should realize that the image cannot substitute who you really are.
Admittedly, making one’s image is important because, in modern society, it seems that the images have become another identity. In offline, lives of people haven’t changed much; however, there is another world, the online. When people see posts in a stranger’s social media, the first thing they look is the pictures, which determine people’s perception of you. If you uploaded pictures of nice clothes and decent restaurants, you are considered as a comely person. On the other hand, if you uploaded weird photos or no photos, people think that you are an erratic person or have something to hide with no firm reasons. There was an example of how powerful the picture can be in social media. During the last presidential election of the United States, the candidate of Democratic party, Hilary Clinton, became a victim of the bad rumor that she was dying for severe disease. Yet, once Clinton uploaded a picture of her talking to her supporters in a good shape, she was able to dispel the rumor. Certainly, making a good image became something people cannot ignore anymore.
Despite the unprecedented importance of good images of oneself, people realized that it has been immoderate. No matter how appealing one’s images are, they cannot replace my true identity or characteristics. For example, when someone applies for the job, the hiring committee doesn’t examine your images, which can be found in your social media or your appearance. The company reads thoroughly your resume to see if you are qualified for the position, contact the references you provided to check anything you said during the interview, and look through your social media to find out how you think personally. Young people who understand the nature of images and its overstated reputation stop spending time on generating a compelling image and do their best to develop themselves.
Some people may say that it’s worthless to develop oneself in the society where media became so powerful and even a single transient image on media follows the personal for a long time has a significant influence on him or her. It is true that the public perception of a person sometimes more influential than the truth that someone had dedicated for the entire life. Nevertheless, the image cannot be the meaningful replacement of the truth behind that image and eventually, it turns out to be an illusion. For example, President Trump was once a businessman and known for his business. But he gained national popularity through a few TV shows such as Apprentice. In the show, he was able to establish the image of inexplicable charisma and later, he had become the president. After he took over the oval office, however, his true identities were revealed by the Press and FBI investigation as well as the ways he handles the political or economic issues.
In conclusion, although images in modern society became important, what matters most is ultimately the truth. The importance of images is overrated by media and eventually, the truth behind the images will reveal. Thus, it is wise that people spend more time to develop oneself than to create the image.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('comely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('person') instead of another adjective.
...cent restaurants, you are considered as a comely person. On the other hand, if you uploaded we...
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Line 3, column 1025, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hape, she was able to dispel the rumor. Certainly, making a good image became so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3055.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 596.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12583892617 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94096258147 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83798743345 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505033557047 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 992.7 704.065955056 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8648642448 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.148148148 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0740740741 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.62962962963 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197185131803 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626179484314 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719654697519 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136757494091 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838102012023 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 100.480337079 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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