Unfortunately in contemporary society creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your rea

Essay topics:

Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating

an appealing image has become more important than

the reality or truth behind that image.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to

which you agree or disagree with the statement and

explain your reasoning for the position you take. In

developing and supporting your position, you should

consider ways in which the statement might or might

not hold true and explain how these considerations

shape your position.

The speaker suggests that creating an appealing image has become more significant than the reality or truth behind that image in contemporary society. I am opposite to thus statement to some extent since it undervalues the significance of the truth which far outweighs the fake image.

As for the political area, the reality behind the created image is more valuable. While the charisma and eloquence of the candidates seems important when electing a mayor or president, the leaders who are regarded as heroes for hundreds of years have always been outstanding for their great achievement and excellent competence when they are in office rather than unidimensional charisma. For example, F.D Roosevelt, one of the most eminent politicians, implemented New Deal to alleviate the pressure of The Great Depression with the lowest rate of unemployment by promoting a myriad of reforms involving agriculture, industry, and banking fields, which dramatically ameliorated the economic condition of America in that age. Another excellent president, Barack Obama, implemented Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act which can be seen as the revolution of governmental reforms for medical care as well as Every Student Succeeds Act which improved the educational condition to a great extent. Both of these two presidents are well-known and honorable for their political achievement instead of the feigned image.

Besides, the real things behind the appealing images should also be attached great importance to in the business area. It is true that the absorbing packages of the products can bring considerable profits for the corporations in the short term, however, it is nearly impossible for the businesses to acquire long-term success merely rely on the appealing image without practical use and sterling qualities. For instance, the Apple company, the most profitable business, is popular all over the world on account of the high quality of its products like iphone and ipad. Even though these products’ appearance is also absorbing, but the main reason customers choose them is the high quality and durability of them. On the contrast, a brand named Hongcheng,which mainly sells mobile phones, has attracted great attention from the customers by its pink and cute mobile phones for several months. However, it went bankrupt soon because of the poor quality of its products. Hence, the enterprises should pay more attention to the real and practical facets of products rather than merely appearance.

Finally, with regard to the art area, the truth behind the image is more important as well. As for the movies, a classical and well-known movie always has its intrinsic advantages which can generate resonance in different generations. One good exemplar, Leon, which has been classical and popular for decades, gains fame for its deep emotion and the ability to touch one’s heart. By contrast, the movie named After earth, in which the most famous Hollywood actor, Willard Smith starred, captured the public’s attention at first because it created an image that the movie must be wonderful on account of Willard Smith. However, it turned out to be criticized seriously for its humdrum story line and poor organization. Therefore, the real quality of the art works always outweighs the feigned images of them.

To sum up, it is wrong to claim that creating an appealing image has become more significant than the truth behind the image nowadays, no matter in political, business or art area.

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Average: 8.7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, as well as, it is true, to sum up, with regard to, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2969.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 556.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33992805755 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85942659539 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517985611511 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 933.3 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.8683966184 60.3974514979 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.380952381 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4761904762 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.21951772744 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245717601003 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827715531786 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947820061467 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185502736617 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112398670946 0.0667264976115 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 100.480337079 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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