Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sur

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Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The author of the issue argues that students should study a various sphere apart from their field of study. I agree with the author’s argument, however, I also believe that studying another sphere is necessary for students. I will explain two reasons why I agree and disagree with the argument.

First, I agree with the author’s argument for the reason that studying the extent which is not students’ broad their perspectives and helps them to determine what occupation they will pursue. In my case, the time when I was a sophomore student in my colleage was turning point in my youth. In my second semester of sophomore, I took a several electric courses from other schools which were foreign language college and school of art. By taking lecture from those college, I realized that my major was more appropriate for me rather than the other courses when it comes to finding a right direction and a proper job.

On the otherhand, studying a subject which is theirs would advance their professionalism and help them to study more deeply. If the only major is replaced with a subject such as English, I could explain why I stand the other side of the author. In case of me, I have studied English for almost 5 months since I graduated from my university. I studied English 5-6 hours in a day more than when I was a in college. Without extra things such as my major curriculum, I could consume about 5 more hours in studying English and it also helped me with concentration. Due to that, I got 30 more higher scores in TOEFL test, only 2 months after I graduate.

In summary, I agree with the author’s assertion when it comes to decide the way the students will chase, otherwise, I refute the author’s argument when students have to improve their speciality.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 363, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'course'?
Suggestion: course
...of sophomore, I took a several electric courses from other schools which were foreign l...
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Line 4, column 468, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this college' or 'those colleges'?
Suggestion: this college; those colleges
...d school of art. By taking lecture from those college, I realized that my major was more appr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 400, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...5-6 hours in a day more than when I was a in college. Without extra things such a...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, apart from, in summary, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 311.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7652733119 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77022662626 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527331189711 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5583033458 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156483787822 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058681437915 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539052001726 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113909942983 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499659457429 0.0667264976115 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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