Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

The above statement emphasizes on the imporatnce of long-term, realisitic goals in one's life over short-term goals. It is true that most of young people are whimisical and capricious and they might forget their long term goals by immidiate fame and recognition. However, the statement is unfairly generalized and it completely neglects the importance of short term achievements. I strongly disagree with the above statement because of the following three reasons.

First of all, long-term goals are impossible to persue over a month or two: one has to work every day to accomplish their long-term goals for a very long time. Nevrtheless, it is difficult for young people to work constantly on their long-term goals without motivation and joy of wroking. This motivation and joy comes from the achievement of short-term goals such as winning a competition at schools or getting good score in the test. The motivation gained from short-term victories help a person to keep working on their selves for achieving long-term goals. One feels more confident on their selves after achieving short-term goals and they might feel their long-term goal more realistic after these immidiate victories.

Secondly, if a person wants to achieve a long-term goal, he or she must divide the goal into many short-term goals. For example, if a student wishes to score good marks during the final examination, they must divide their goal into every day short-term goals and they have to work on these short-term goals through out the year. They must achieve their every day short-term goals such as completeing homework, reading what their teacher has taught on that day, etcetera. and these achivements of short-term goals will lead them to score good during the final examination.

Thirdly, working on short-term goals prepares oneself for victories as well as failures. If one fails achieving their immidiate goal then they learn how to accept a failure and how to keep going with their lives. on the other hand, if one gets success in their short-term goal, it teaches them how to manage their victory and how to start working on their next goal. If a person was just working on their long-term goal and fails to achieve it then a possibility is that they might loose their confidence about their selves. Hence, immidiate goals are also as much important as long-term realistic goals.

Therefore, it is imporatatn for young people to set long-term, realistic goals and they should not forget about thier long-term goals over immediate fame and victories. However, it is also important for oneself to work on their short-term goals for gaining more confidence about their selves, for gaining motivation, and to learn how to accept success and failure. In conclusion, achievement of short-term goals are as much as important as that of the long-term and pragmatic goals in one's life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: one's
...atnce of long-term, realisitic goals in ones life over short-term goals. It is true ...
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...importance of short term achievements. I strongly disagree with the above stateme...
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... have to work on these short-term goals through out the year. They must achieve their every...
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...of the long-term and pragmatic goals in ones life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12127659574 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72006860218 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.410638297872 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4922064241 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.619047619 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.19047619048 5.21951772744 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258429585922 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124166206005 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895969809115 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195762620111 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581214867905 0.0667264976115 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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