Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

When someone is young, there are a paramount of opportunities available to them. Amongst these, there are two different types of choices for everyone -- one that would provide instant recognition, and the other that would reap it's rewards in the longer term. I agree with the prompt that suggests that young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition and here are my 2 reasons for the same.

No matter how mature and experienced someone grows, he/she simply cannot predict if a trend is a fad that would be dead by the next quarter or a revolution that would transform industries over the next decade. For example, learning to build a computer was considered as an essential skill in the 1990s. As the computer industry was booming, computers were finding place out of specialised industries to everyday houses. One might argue that companies that focused on getting recognised as the best computer building companies would make a fortune. Though it might be true in some cases, major computer building corporations died in 6 months as computer-building industry became stagnant. Things would worsen if an individual would start building computers for the fame, without any interest in doing so. Rather, if that person -- having a natural inclination towards problem solving -- would have chosen a troubleshooting job, he/she would remain relevant today.

Alongside, if one is looking to build a career in a particular field, success is guarenteed only if the person has achieved mastery in his/her craft. And mastery requires repeating the same process over long periods of time in a manner it is done by muscle memory. If someone is running after fads to gain instant recognition, he/she might have to shift towards different "interests" over time, which is counter productive to achieving mastery.
Research suggests that an average time span an NBA players has spent on the court by time reaching the peak of his/her career is well over 10,000 hours. To gain that level of success and achieve mastery, one cannot afford to take up a variety of things -- with the primary goal to get famous.

Lastly, I would like to concede that some may argue about how instant recognition helps in keeping someone motivated to perform a task repitively over long periods of time. This does not hold water, as no studies have shown that no amount of (external) motivation can keep someone engaged to a task. Every athelete scored a gold in the Olympics because he/she was intrinsically motivated to do so. Adding to that, if someone is correlating his/her motivation to do a task with the fame achieved -- it is inevitable to focus on getting fame primarily rather than getting better at the task.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, lastly, look, may, so, well, for example, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0590809628 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79907541618 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560175054705 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0899931252 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.684210526 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0526315789 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10526315789 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188380394121 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058179121164 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150812346369 0.0758088955206 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120954456389 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169355017125 0.0667264976115 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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