Does modern technology make life more convenient, or was life better when technology was simpler? To what extent do you support? Give your reason.

Essay topics: Does modern technology make life more convenient, or was life better when technology was simpler? To what extent do you support? Give your reason.

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Since modern technologies present in this world, people's lives are more comfortable. However, live of societies are better when technology was ordinary.
Apropos to Media Indonesia, numerous inhabitants feel preferable when their life without modern technology. Hand phone is one of modern technology which build personality of people far each other. They prefer to call each one with this device than talk face-to-face. They reckon that do not need extend time to connect with their relative in order they simply need a brief time to contact the other. In past, people were closer each other due to interact directly if they needed some assistance. They did not have high technology thus they had to make live relationship when they wanted to share about their problem or their experience. As a result, citizens who remain in old days more appreciate each other than now.
Nevertheless, the previous statement is rather dubious where modern technology creates youth generation’s life easier because they could find information and share it in brief time. Moreover, they could build communication with their friends who live far from them. When they have duties, they could do that homework at home and the simply create communication from internet. While they find some articles for their assignment on the internet, they could corporate to do that together. For this reason, they could spend their full-time at their house without do their homework outside together with their relative. The other reason, internet helps them to create good relationship with their teacher. When their teacher would give some data to them, he could send it by email. Therefore, they do not need attend to their teacher house and they do not disturb their teacher activity at home.
In conclusion, high technology is very important for societies at present due to create their life more convenient. On the other hand, while technology is origin, citizen who live in the past are plain.

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Sentence: Since modern technology present in this world, people life more comfortable.
Suggestion: Since modern technologies present in this world, people's lives are more comfortable.

Sentence: In past, people were closer each other due to they had to interact directly if they needed some assistance.
Suggestion: don't put a sentence after 'due to'

Sentence: As a result, citizen who life in old days are more appreciate each other than now.
Description: A WH-pronoun, nominative is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to who and life

Sentence: Nevertheless, the previous statement are rather dubious where modern technology creates youth generation's life easier because they could find information and share it in brief time.
Description: The fragment the previous statement is not usually followed by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is

Sentence: In conclusion, high technology is very important for society at present due to it creates their life more convenient.
Description: The fragment it creates their is rare
Suggestion: don't put a sentence after 'due to'

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No. of Sentences: 19 15
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No. of Characters: 1612 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Number of Paragraphs: 4 5