The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of men's role at senior position in mainly three multinational companies IBM, Microsoft and Apple surveyed over a period of 30 years from 1980 to 2010.
In the overall trend, it is evident that over the three decades, the contribution of senior men kept on rising significantly in all the three companies, with the highest proportion in IBM.
Getting back to details, IBM hired only one-tenth of men at senior level as compared to other two countries. However, this rose steadily to 30% in 2000. After which, a sudden spike in the number raised the participation to the peak value above 60%.
In contrary, nearly 10% senior men were offered positions in Microsoft during the first decade. Later, a continuous increasing pattern was witnessed in the number. Finally, in 2010, number soared to more than 40%. On the other hand, in 1980 slightly above 10% were joined by Apple, which were the largest among all. In 2010, it jumped to 22% after few fluctuations, but remained at the lowest position as compared to others.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
...gnificantly in all the three companies, with highest proportion in IBM. Getting back to d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 889.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93888888889 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66881279381 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655555555556 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.334356311 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225863389361 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712595616895 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742571350374 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13937140935 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756851985351 0.0819641961636 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
...gnificantly in all the three companies, with highest proportion in IBM. Getting back to d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 889.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93888888889 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66881279381 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655555555556 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.334356311 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225863389361 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712595616895 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742571350374 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13937140935 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756851985351 0.0819641961636 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.