The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consupmtion in two different countries

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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consupmtion in two different countries.

The graph chart illustrates the changes in amount of water use worldwide in terms of 3 different using are (Agriculture,Industrial use,Domestic use) over a period of 100 years ( from 1900 to 2000) while the table compares the water consumption in two different countries ( brazil and congo ) in 2000.

In 1900 ,nearly 500 km water was used for agrıculture.But this figure remarkably increased throughout years and slightly surpassed 3000 km in 2000,nearly 3 times more than the amount of water use for ındustry.Similarly the proportıon of water consumptıon was identical for ındustrial use and domestıc use in 1900 ,at nearly 100 km.And thıs fıgure remaıned same untıl around 1940 years.But after this year the amount of water consuptıon went up significantly and reached nearly 1000 km in 2000,somewhatt 2 times more than the proportion of water consumptıon for domestıc use for this year.Similarly the amount of water use for domestıic areas slightly rose after 1960 and reached nearly 500 km.

The population of brazıl was 176 million in 2000,35 times more than the populatıon of congo.And the proportıon of ırrıgated land was nearly 27 000 km in brazil , 265 times more than the proportıon of ırrıgated land in congo.And the amount of water consumptıon per person was nearly 40 times more than congos fıgure at somewhat 360 m küp.

Overall ıt ıs clear that water was mostly used for agrıculture throughout years all over the world.And there was a huge difference for water consumptıon between brazıl and congo.

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Average: 6.2 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, similarly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1301.0 965.302439024 135% => OK
No of words: 247.0 196.424390244 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26720647773 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29762541485 2.65546596893 124% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51012145749 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 351.9 283.868780488 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.482926829268 1242% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 22.4926829268 271% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 196.749841169 43.030603864 457% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 325.25 112.824112599 288% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.75 22.9334400587 269% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.23603664747 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 1.69756097561 1708% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238006138842 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182050123995 0.103423049105 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126499100861 0.0843802449381 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182050123995 0.15604864568 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126499100861 0.0819641961636 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.3 13.2329268293 259% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 26.48 61.2550243902 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.7 10.3012195122 240% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 11.4140731707 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 11.4329268293 254% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.4 10.9970731707 240% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.0658536585 262% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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