You bought a music concert ticket. However you are unable to go. So you offer the ticket to your friend.
- explain detailed the concert.
- why you are unable to go
- how can your friend receive the ticket.
Dear Moon,
Hello, I’m Darby. I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to offer a music concert ticket to you if you are available because I had an accident yesterday.
Firstly, I’ll let you know what the concert is. A group, BIGBANG will perform in the concert. They are 4 people as you know well. I heard that you really love the group. It is on 25th, January 2015. Therefore, I want you to go there. If you come to my house, I will give you the ticket.
I have really looked forward to going there. However, I had a car accident yesterday. My leg is broken so I can’t see the concert.
If you come to my house on 23th, January 2015, you will be given the ticket or in case that you are not available, I will send you the ticket. Please let me know what you prefer.
All the best,
Darby.
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