The bar chart below illustrates the use of tobacco products by secondary school students in the United States.
The given bar chart depicts the data about the proportion of students who used tobacco in Middle and High Schools in the United States.
Overall, it can be seen that the students of a High School outnumbered the Middle School's students in smoking all seven types of the tobacco products mentioned in the question.
As regards, Any Use, headed the list for both High Schools and Middle Schools at 35% and 13% respectively. It is interesting to note that Any Use remained the most chewed products in two schools as compared to other products. Likewise, ranked in second place was Cigarette smoking...
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better from:
The given bar chart depicts the data about the proportion of students who used tobacco in Middle and High Schools in the United States.
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The given bar chart depicts the proportion of students using different types of tobacco in Middle and High Schools in the United States.
'the data about' is duplicated. can be removed.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 188 200
No. of Characters: 867 1000
No. of Different Words: 110 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.703 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.612 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.398 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 66 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 45 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.156 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.438 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.681 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chools. All figures stayed below 5%.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
likewise, second, third, as regards, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 910.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84042553191 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41751661841 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579787234043 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3540747916 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.111111111 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287345776209 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132121952948 0.103423049105 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113417655206 0.0843802449381 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216396713361 0.15604864568 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121322027912 0.0819641961636 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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