The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

The bar chart gives the number of hours adolescents in Chester spent for seven activities: going to pubs, watching television, shopping, doing homework, doing sport, watching DVDs and bowling from 2002 to 2007.
Overall, there was a significant increase in the quantity of hours teenagers spending on going to discos, watching television and shopping, while several activities like doing homework and sport or bowling saw a decrease. Furthermore, young people spent more time watching television than any other activities but least time bowling.
Teenagers spent 25 hours to watch television in the first given year and this trend continued going up to around 37 hours in 2007. Similarly, the number of hours they went to discos and shopping increased dramatically as about twice as they used to do in 2002, from about 7 to 17 and 6 to 15 hours respectively.
On the other hand, they did not spend much time doing homework and sport in 5 years, which declined from around 12 and 10 hours back to 7 and 2. Furthermore, although there was no difference in the hours spending for watching DVDs in 2002 and 2007, at 10 hours each year, it reached a peak of nearly 18 hours in 2004.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
...he quantity of hours teenagers spending on going to discos, watching television and shop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, similarly, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 980.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8275862069 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6706686545 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.7829461584 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 5.23603664747 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307700514482 0.215688989381 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145178332325 0.103423049105 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635931498204 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196851109243 0.15604864568 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489988294404 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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