The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different age groups who did regularly physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different age groups who did regularly physical activity in 2010

The bar chart indicates how many Australian man and women did regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of women who did regular physical activity was higher more than for all age groups, except the 15 to 24 age group.
Looking at the younger age groups in more detail, it is evident that 52.8% of men in the 15 to 24-age group exercised regularly, compared to 47.7% of women. However, the proportion of women in the 25 to 34 age group who did regularly physical activity was higher than for men, at 48.9% and 42.2% respectively. In the 35 and 44 age group, these numbers stood at 52.2% for women and 39.5% for men, which was the greatest difference of all age groups.
Turning to the older age groups, it is clear that the ratio of women in aged 45 to 54 who did regular physical activity stood at 53.3% for women as opposed to 43.1% for men. In the 55 to 64 category, 53% of women and 45.1% of men exercised regularly. Finally, 47.1% of women aged 65 and over and 46.7% of men in the same category exercised regularly, which was the smallest difference of all age categorized.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'category' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'categories'.
Suggestion: categories
...posed to 43.1% for men. In the 55 to 64 category, 53% of women and 45.1% of men exercise...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44660194175 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43930952034 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495145631068 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 277.2 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8463106183 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.465207550403 0.215688989381 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237817158004 0.103423049105 230% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931902847203 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327247588967 0.15604864568 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028832102426 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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