The chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women who performed routine exercises in various age groups in 2010.

Overall, it can be seen that although females surpassed their counterparts in 25 and over age groups, males outstripped females in 15 to 24 age groups.

As regards 45 to 54 age groups, females stood at 53.3%, considerably higher than males at 43.1%. And it is interesting to note that the figure (53.3%) of girls was the highest percentage, as opposed to the remaining age groups. Next came 55 to 64 groups, with girls at 53%, almost as equal to the topmost total, whereas males began at 43.1%. Third on the rank was 35 to 44 groups with females at still over half at 52.5%, while males at 39.5%, making it the least sum of all age groups. Females saw just ahead of boys at 47.1% vs 46.7% for 65 and over. Bottom of the groups were 25 to 34, males (42.2%), who were not nearly as active as females (48.9%).

In contrast, males for 15 to 24 groups experienced 52.8%, which remained the third biggest amount, and females witnessed 47.7%.

Votes
Average: 5.9 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st amount, and females witnessed 47.7%.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
still, third, whereas, while, as regards, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 885.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 193.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58549222798 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43266317924 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59585492228 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.0474401008 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.23603664747 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142191644877 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719627313479 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981574967037 0.0843802449381 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1218391452 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124274005387 0.0819641961636 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.0 61.2550243902 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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flaws:
Try not to list figure by figure in the third paragraph. Need to pick up relevant data, like:

females in 35-44, 45-54, 55-64 have almost the same figure.

the figures for 65 and over are almost equal.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 193 200
No. of Characters: 836 1000
No. of Different Words: 117 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.727 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.332 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.358 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 51 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 17 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.475 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.449 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.659 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4