The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

Essay topics:

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

The pie charts elucidate the different contributing factors to make people happy between two age groups, those who are under 30 and over 30. There are similar factors that make both age groups happy, while there are some different factors that make each age group happy.
Both age groups feel happy when they achieved the task at work perfectly for 31% under 30 years old and 32% for over 30 years old. This figure is followed by for the doing hobbies and other factors. The second highest factor was the hobbies which recorded at 22% for under 30 years old and 24% for those for older.
In contrast, there are some differences in the happiness factors between age groups. While young people were feeling happy for having the attractive appearances (of 20%), the elders prefer with financial securities (of 20%). Meanwhile the younger people feel happy when they are travelling around (of about 15%), the elder people feel happy when they are being with family (14%).

Votes
Average: 7.3 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...refer with financial securities of 20%. Meanwhile the younger people feel happy when they...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'in contrast']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.245989304813 0.268076937826 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.139037433155 0.116061578633 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112299465241 0.0759168565197 148% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0160427807487 0.0366838410393 44% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0160427807487 0.0131127313244 122% => OK
Prepositions: 0.144385026738 0.155750635184 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0374331550802 0.0379272487307 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.138715419 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00534759358289 0.0210936926555 25% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.101604278075 0.0948980150116 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0374331550802 0.00967000014798 387% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 964.0 1161.00487805 83% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.9 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80722891566 5.90752243213 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73763899035 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.301204819277 0.337110787985 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.192771084337 0.247514529752 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.10843373494 0.171178102325 63% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0843373493976 0.112407865282 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.138715419 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572289156627 0.546246751206 105% => OK
Word variations: 49.3348473396 49.3433353143 100% => OK
How many sentences: 8.0 8.93414634146 90% => OK
Sentence length: 20.75 23.0094962315 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4291701479 42.9750493124 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5 135.714022679 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.0094962315 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.689975730869 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.84146341463 78% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.48048780488 68% => OK
Readability: 40.0271084337 47.7609492067 84% => OK
Elegance: 2.5 2.94281807926 85% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305827136356 0.418131533498 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138730997251 0.181151798455 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0913627117118 0.0850326197045 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.661564494001 0.706616315825 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138712278357 0.157042692854 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149119731988 0.228904883108 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708377425357 0.108899403657 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.197172732916 0.367819155151 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00131701491257 0.0812612215331 2% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216505840837 0.316326947829 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854475936771 0.0921553760075 93% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70731707317 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.08536585366 49% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 3.16585365854 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.02926829268 66% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 7.1512195122 112% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.