The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph compares the data about how much fish and some various kinds of meat were consumed in a European country over a thirty-two year period from 1979 to 2004. The units are measured in grams.
Overall, it can be seen that the amount of consumption of Chicken climbed up and the amount for the rest items slid throughout the period in the question.
As regards Chicken and Fish, they stood at around 148 grams and 52 grams per person per week in 1979, which was third and bottom in the list respectively. While there was a gradual rise in the consumption of Chicken to finish the term at approximately 249 grams, making it the most popular food in 2004. On the other hand, Fish experienced an opposite trend, declining steadily year on year to about 48 grams in the end of the term, making it the least preferred food.
With respect to Beef and Lamb, there were similar trends for both foods. 1979 to 1982 witnessed a sharp fall from 230 grams to 180 grams for Beef. Likewise, there was a rapid fall to 120 grams from 150 grams for the similar years in the consumption of Lamb. Despite declining suddenly, it rocketed to roughly around 240 grams, the amount being the peak figure of 1983, whereas Lamb saw a steady dip year on year to about 53 grams, which was slightly ahead of Fish at 52 grams in 1979. Having hit a peak in 1983, similarly, Beef followed a similar downward trend as the Lamb, but finished at 100 in 2004, almost two times higher than the lamb.
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flaws:
It is good to focus on details. but also need to look at relevance as a whole. for example, before 1989, beef is on the top even though with fluctuations. read a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 271 200
No. of Characters: 1171 1000
No. of Different Words: 145 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.057 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.321 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.208 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.604 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...p and the amount for the rest items slid throughout the period in the question. ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, likewise, similarly, so, third, whereas, while, as regards, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1215.0 965.302439024 126% => OK
No of words: 271.0 196.424390244 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48339483395 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26980765639 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 106.607317073 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560885608856 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 283.868780488 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8137222339 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.454545455 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6363636364 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125168861863 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049031533809 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619325348573 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923966924239 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754256299555 0.0819641961636 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.96 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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