The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical day in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical day in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

The line graph compares demand for electricity on typical winter and summer days in England and the pie chart demonstrates the percentages of electricity usage in an average English home.

Overall, the daily demand of electricity is twice as high in Winter compared to in Summer. It is clear that the majority of electricity used goes to heating room and water.

Electricity demand at 12 p.m on a winter day is 36000 as opposed to 18000 on a summer day. Then this figure increases in three hours later and has a dip to 30000 before rises again to the high of 40000 at 3 p.m. In contrast to these fluctuations, the amount of electricity needed on a summer day grows gradually to its peak of 20000 from 12 p.m to 3 p.m. From 3 p.m onwards, the rising patterns continue to be set in demand on a winter day with the amount needed reaching its highest point of 50000 at 10 p.m while summer’s figure leveled out at 18000 prior to its upsurge again to 20000 at 11 p.m.

52% of electricity production is consumed for heating room and water. Additionally, water and ovens, kettles, washing machines came to a second close ( 18%) and there is an equivalence in the proportions of two remaining sectors at 15%.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... washing machines came to a second close 18% and there is an equivalence in the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, then, while, in contrast, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 996.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58986175115 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7290134264 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543778801843 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 177.035542571 43.030603864 411% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 166.0 112.824112599 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.1666666667 22.9334400587 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357074576368 0.215688989381 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216400463376 0.103423049105 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.18013356035 0.0843802449381 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258710923543 0.15604864568 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.195607968096 0.0819641961636 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.2329268293 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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