The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph compares the variations in terms of the percentage of elderly people who are 65 or more in three major nations from 1940 to 2040.

Overall, it is evident from the chart given that there is a general upward trend in all countries. Besides, the substantial rise can be seen in the figure in Japan,

In 1940, the proportion of ageing population in America, Sweden, and Japan was under 10 per cent, especially the figure of Japanese older people was only 5 per cent or so. In the following 60 years, elderly people in the US and Sweden saw a rise by over 5 per cent until the number in Sweden overtook that of America in 1997. In contrast, the percentage of ageing population in Japan remained under 5 per cent.

In the 2000s, a dramatic increase could be seen in the rate of elderly residents in Japan and Sweden, whereas this figure in the US remain relatively stable. From 2020, it is projected that this rate would increase, notably, a substatial rise can be observed in 2030 with regard to the ratio of Japanese older people until it is expected to overtake that in the remaining nations about 2 years later and reach nearly 28 per cent in the final stage, followed by Sweden and the US, at approximately 26 and 23 per cent, respectively.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...rms of the percentage of elderly people who are 65 or more in three major nations from ...
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Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...weden overtook that of America in 1997. In contrast, the percentage of ageing popu...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... in Japan remained under 5 per cent. In the 2000s, a dramatic increase could be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, so, whereas, in contrast, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1036.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 228.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54385964912 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52963354268 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535087719298 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.7585562935 43.030603864 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 148.0 112.824112599 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5714285714 22.9334400587 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123055018986 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664664832202 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644550894483 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849958741187 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755974619722 0.0819641961636 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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