The longing of yonger brother
Name : Valen kurnia apriliana
Nim : 18551061
Class : TBI 5C
There used to be someone who was very precious to me, always been my protector for so long, always been my loyal listener, always made me smile when I was sad .You are something precious to me, something I always miss, something I wish I could come back, something I always wish I had again to accompany me
Since then, the days I have lived have been completely different. There are no more great people who protect me, no more great people who love me, no more great people who want to listen to all my stories and no more great people who defend me when I am Marahin by my parents. Why is time so fast separating the two of us ?, why is time so fast snatching you from my side ?, I really miss your figure , really miss.
Brother, if only you knew, how valuable you are in my life, how much you mean to me, how much I love you, how much I want to be beside you and if only you knew, only you could understand about me.You taught me many things, you taught me the meaning of togetherness, you taught me the meaning of love and you also taught me the meaning of kinship.
Brother if only you were still beside me, I will definitely tell you many things, and I will definitely never feel lonely , like today I am without you, I really want to spend a lot of time with you, I really miss you Your smile and laugh, you used to say to me, that you will never leave me, you will always take care of me, and you are always there for me, but once again I ask why did you go away from me so quickly? Why can Allah take you from me? I don't know how else I can express my longing for this, apart from slowly crossing out this white paper. And I also hope, right now you are beside me and reading what I have written for you.
Brother, I know wanting you back is an impossibility that will happen but I really hope to meet you even though it's just a dream, I also want to tell and hug you even though it's only through a dream, May you be calm in that nature yaa. I'm very fond of here, greetings from your careless sister.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ner, always made me smile when I was sad .You are something precious to me, someth...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: You
...r, always made me smile when I was sad .You are something precious to me, something...
^^^
Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rom my side ?, I really miss your figure , really miss. Brother, if only you kne...
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Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...om my side ?, I really miss your figure , really miss. Brother, if only you knew...
^^
Line 6, column 196, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: You
...new, only you could understand about me.You taught me many things, you taught me th...
^^^
Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and I will definitely never feel lonely , like today I am without you, I really w...
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Line 7, column 454, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ckly? Why can Allah take you from me? I dont know how else I can express my longing ...
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Line 8, column 236, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...am, May you be calm in that nature yaa. Im very fond of here, greetings from your ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, still, then, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 93.0 5.60731707317 1659% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 965.302439024 173% => OK
No of words: 407.0 196.424390244 207% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.11302211302 4.92477711251 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 3.73543355544 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.08513854436 2.65546596893 79% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 106.607317073 175% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459459459459 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 523.8 283.868780488 185% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 1.53170731707 914% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 40.0 22.4926829268 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 142.351712318 43.030603864 331% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 167.4 112.824112599 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.7 22.9334400587 177% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0391174820904 0.215688989381 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0186379692718 0.103423049105 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0230605686623 0.0843802449381 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0216159966905 0.15604864568 14% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016454560106 0.0819641961636 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.2329268293 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.26 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.45 11.4140731707 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.78 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.4329268293 236% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.9970731707 164% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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