The pie charts below show the avarage household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the avarage household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts compare Malaysia and Japan in terms of the expenditure on 5 different categories: Housing, Transport, Food, Health care and Other goods and services in an average household in 2010.

Overall, other goods and services and food accounted for the large proportions in the total expense in an average househould in both nations, compares to the percentage of health care was less much.

In malaysia, people spent the largest expenditure on housing with 34%, followed by food and other goods and services, with 27% and 26% respectively. Only 3% of total expense on health care which was the lowest figure shown in the charts and 10% for transport.

By contrast, in 2010, the average household expenditure on other goods and services in japan was the highest proportion, at 29%. The spending on housing, transport and food were the same with 21% 20% and 24% respectively. Insurance also accounted for the lowest percentage of total expense, just 6%.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 833.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23899371069 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75404201834 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522012578616 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3101315175 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.71428571429 5.23603664747 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175501309909 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886158508503 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110319395811 0.0843802449381 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128707710513 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112361479174 0.0819641961636 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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