The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts compare the proportions of the various categories in different countries, Japan and Malaysia, in 2010.

To sum up, The biggest proportion in Japan was other goods and services, while in Malaysia was housing.Moreover, the smallest part in Malaysia and Japan were health care.

Firstly, in Japan, there was 29% of the other goods and services, making the most significant part of expenses.Next, expenses of food, housing and transport were 24% and around 21% respectively.Expenses of health care was the most unimportant part, which is 6%.

Secondly, the biggest proportion in Malaysia was housing, which is 34%.There were around 26% of expenses of food and other goods and services.However, the smallest parts of expenses of transport and health care were 10% and 3% respectively.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 678.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 126.0 196.424390244 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38095238095 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.35036895883 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40367948162 2.65546596893 128% => OK
Unique words: 64.0 106.607317073 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507936507937 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 189.0 283.868780488 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.170796741 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.5 112.824112599 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 22.9334400587 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.25 5.23603664747 349% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132926100919 0.215688989381 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120943986704 0.103423049105 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110384710501 0.0843802449381 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120943986704 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110384710501 0.0819641961636 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 13.2329268293 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 11.4140731707 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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