The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was
refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The table depicts about how many tourists visited Ashdown Museum before and after the renovation. The two pie charts compare the proportion of satisfaction among the visitors the year before and the year after the museum was refurbished.
Overall, it can be seen that both the total number of visitors to the museum and the percentage of contentment surged significantly the year after remodelling.
In terms of the surveys conducted the year before refurbishment, 40% of the people who visited the museum were dissatisfied, whereas the given figure slid dramatically to 15% after the repair of the exhibition building. In contrast, there was a substantial growth in the satisfaction rate from 30% (before refurbishment) to 40% after restoration. Very satisfied figure also followed the increasing trend to 35%, which was twice as many as the year before remaking at 15%. Year after rebuilding witnessed a little drop in the dissatisfaction total to 5% from 10%, while the guests who did not pass comment stood at 5%, making it the identical figure as the time before reformation (5%).
Turning to the table, the net number of foreigners ballooned sharply, rocketing to 92,000 the year after the improvement of the museum as opposed to the year before at 74,000.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
'the year before and the year after' is repeated. better to use 'during the same two periods'.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 207 200
No. of Characters: 1022 1000
No. of Different Words: 113 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.793 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.937 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.926 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.184 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.491 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.724 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, whereas, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1065.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14492753623 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95461085669 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 319.5 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5924869896 43.030603864 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.125 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318516320701 0.215688989381 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147708726531 0.103423049105 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727662809297 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207025778858 0.15604864568 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07947715689 0.0819641961636 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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