The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club about the club’s activities, facilities and opening hours.
Summarise the information.
The given table compares the views of male and female members about the club’s activities, facilities and opening hours.
Overall, the majority of both genders rated all three kinds of activities very satisfied as opposed to remaining two ratings in the table.
Looking at the range of activities, over half (55%) of males were very satisfied, compared to around a third (35%) of females. 35% of females gave the rating satisfied, slightly lower than the counterparts at exactly two-fifths (40%). Not satisfied responses were given by 5% (males) which was nowhere near as close to females at 30%. Turning to the club facilities, very satisfied grading was nearly similar at 64% (females) and 63% (males) respectively. 27% of males marked the activities satisfied vs females with 22%, a bit difference. In contrast, 14% of females ranked not satisfied and only one tenth of males thought so.
When it comes to opening hours, nearly three-fourths (72%) of females were very happy, whereas only 3% were not contended. Precisely, a quarter of females (25%) were happy for opening hours. 44% of males were very satisfied, much more than females at 37%. Very happy evaluation was given by Just under one-fifth (19%) of males.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need to catch up the main features in task I essays. Every thing should be around main features. for example, the 3 main features for this essay are:
1. male members are generally happy or satisfied with the range of activities at the dub, with only 5% dissatisfied
2. the female respondents were much happier with the dub opening hours than their male counterparts. Almost three-quarters of them were very satisfied with these and only 3% were unhappy
3. for club facilities, male and female have almost the same pattern.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 10
No. of Words: 201 200
No. of Characters: 957 1000
No. of Different Words: 115 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.765 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.761 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.621 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.789 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.25 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.442 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.644 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.167 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, third, whereas, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1017.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05970149254 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68400467437 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592039800995 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.4142490271 43.030603864 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.75 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41666666667 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101421694641 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508288091737 0.103423049105 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107512041872 0.0843802449381 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118432927646 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161425728714 0.0819641961636 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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