The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table represents data about the global market share of 7 different computer companies in the year 2006 and 2007. This report will evaluate the data given.

Overall, the largest percentage of share in the market was of HP manufacturers whereas the least share belonged to the company named ‘Fujitsu-Siemens’. Furthermore, only the two companies, HP and Dell experienced an increase in their share proportions.

HP maintained its top position around the global share market with 31.4% market share in 2006 and 34% market share in 2007. Similarly, the percentage of share of the dell company shifted up from 16.6% to 20.2% within a single year while Acer faced a slight fall which was 10.7% in the last given year.

In terms of the two companies, Toshiba and Lenovo, Toshiba manufacturers achieved a slight rise in their proportion of share from 6.2% to 7.3%, however, the share of the Lenovo company fell off slightly reaching the value of Toshiba’s initial share value. Lastly, the industry ‘Fujitsu-Siemens’ and other computer industries accounted for 2.3% and 19.3% share respectively in the worldwide share market in 2007.

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Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...east share belonged to the company named 'Fujitsu-Siemens'. Furthermore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, lastly, similarly, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 981.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33152173913 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.54703992116 2.65546596893 134% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554347826087 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2826674924 43.030603864 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.625 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.23603664747 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273837206778 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133108035481 0.103423049105 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952215953425 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182880125684 0.15604864568 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531342519877 0.0819641961636 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.2329268293 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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