The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

The pie charts given below illustrate the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. The data are measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seeing that the significant increase was Food and Beverage, while the lowest percentage was Home Furnishings.

In 2005, based on the first charts, the largest percentage was Electronics and Appliances. Which had more than a third. Difference from Home Furnishings as the second biggest percentage was a quarter. Followed by Food and Beverage, it got 22%. While Video Games had 18%, which were the smallest percentage of the online shopping sales.

On the other hand, in 2010 Food and Beverage showed a significant growth which had one in ten. The second biggest increase was one in twenty from Video Games. Both of Home Furnishings and Appliance were run into the lowest decrease, which was Home Furnishings got one in ten decrease, while one in twenty decrease from Electronics and Appliance.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...centage was Electronics and Appliances. Which had more than a third. Difference from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, third, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09433962264 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70201737735 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547169811321 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4946562691 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6363636364 112.824112599 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4545454545 22.9334400587 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19901906948 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880645549133 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.212605960179 0.0843802449381 252% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165645977413 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168537122943 0.0819641961636 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.2329268293 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.3012195122 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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