Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.Write a letter to the

Essay topics:

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.

Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter

• explain why you are writing

• describe your circumstances

• ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to get admission in the computer course that is being offered in your academy. but before that I want let you know about my education background first.

I have always been interested in computer studies all my life, but due to some financial reasons I had to choose a trade course for my living. Although my field is different, but I often watch tutorials and educational programs related to computer programming because of my immense interest in computer and technology.

I request you to please consider my case, and give me an opportunity to enroll in your centre so I can make my dream come true. I assure you that without any formal studies of computer, my knowledge will be not less than any other student; I am also willing to give an entry test to prove myself.

Thank you for your time and I hope a positive reply from your side.

Yours faithfully,

Yasir Khan

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... that is being offered in your academy. but before that I want let you know about m...
^^^
Line 13, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r side. Yours faithfully, Yasir Khan
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 765.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 165.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63636363636 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56696538636 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.678787878788 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.3643399107 44.8134815571 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.625 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237479804911 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908740822543 0.0766984524023 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556126230413 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130769120149 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289560744766 0.0580467560999 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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