Essay topics: You have recently gone to live in a new city.Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter:• Explain why you have gone to live in the new city• Describe the place where you are living• Invite your friend to come and se

Essay topics:

Essay topics: You have recently gone to live in a new city.
Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter:
• Explain why you have gone to live in the new city
• Describe the place where you are living
• Invite your friend to come and see you

Hi John,

I am sorry that I have not written to you for so long, the reason is that I have recently moved to Dallas. As you know, I have been working in the same company for almost eight years in the same position. Frankly, I even started to think about changing my work. Fortunately, I was promoted and now I am a head of a department but to get it I had to move to Taxes.

Anyway, I rent a huge two-story cottage with a small garden and huge car garage for two cars. The neighborhood is calm and my novel office is situated around the corner. There is almost everything you may wish for having a comfortable life from a big shopping center to a gym with a water pool.

Before I finish this letter, I would like to invite you to visit me this summer. I promise that you will be having a good time, of course, you may stay in my place; there is a plethora of room and all needed facilities are located nearby.

Hope that you accept the invitation.

Your friend,

Eugene.

Votes
Average: 8.3 (4 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, frankly, if, may, so, of course, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 803.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.27127659574 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39866489007 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632978723404 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4313697053 44.8134815571 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0909090909 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 4.34317383033 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222391553699 0.216113520407 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832351154246 0.0766984524023 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737684826953 0.0603063233224 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112840887373 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461085234975 0.0580467560999 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 8.37731958763 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.19 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 7.59969072165 90% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 41.2886597938 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

The neighborhood is calm and my novel office is situated around the corner.
description: 'which corner'? is not clear

flaws:
1. try not write a lot of 'that'

I am sorry that I have not written to you for so long, the reason is that I have recently moved to Dallas.

revised:
I am sorry for not having written to you for a long time due to my recent move to Dallas.

2. try not to use a lot of adverbs in the beginning, like:

Frankly, I even started to think about changing my work. Fortunately, I was promoted and now I am a head of a department but to get it I had to move to Taxes.

Anyway, I rent a huge two-story cottage...

it made the sentences not smoothly.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 188 350
No. of Characters: 755 1500
No. of Different Words: 121 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.703 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.016 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.287 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 47 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 23 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 15 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.328 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.736 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.168 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5