WRITE A LETTER TO THE MANAGER OF YOUR COMPANY THAT YOU WOULD LIKE TO TAKE A TRAINING COURSE. MENTION THE FOLLOWING:-WHAT KIND OF TRAINING IT IS.-HOW IT WILL BENEFIT YOUR JOB-HOW YOU ARE GOING TO ARRANGE IT WITH YOUR WORK SCHEDULE

Essay topics:

WRITE A LETTER TO THE MANAGER OF YOUR COMPANY THAT YOU WOULD LIKE TO TAKE A TRAINING COURSE. MENTION THE FOLLOWING:
-WHAT KIND OF TRAINING IT IS.
-HOW IT WILL BENEFIT YOUR JOB
-HOW YOU ARE GOING TO ARRANGE IT WITH YOUR WORK SCHEDULE

Dear manager,

I am Shiwank, the project co-ordinator of Al Shirawi Lmt in Al Rashidya Branch.

I am writing to request for the permission to join the seminars which are being held at NAB office to provide the information about the road constructive materials.

Sir, this morning, I read the letter on notice board which was sent by the higher authority. I am pleased after reading that they have arranged training seminar to tell about the materials and the machineries that are used to construct the roads.

Certainly, it is a great opportunity to know about the traders and their services available in our area. This will definitely help as we are working on airport tunnel project where our necessity is to maintain the road in a better condition. Hence, we need to buy or rent the water tanks, tiles, concrete, labour etc.

Moreover, I am able to manage the time as well. I can attend the seminars at 1:00 pm during lunch break. Therefore, it will not affect my working hours. Kindly, permit me to register my name for this training course.

Anticipating your prompt reply.

Yours faithfully,
Shiwank

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...project co-ordinator of Al Shirawi Lmt. in Al Rashidya Branch. I am writing to ...
^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: TODAY_MORNING[1]
Message: This is a non-standard collocation. Normally, 'this morning' is used.
Suggestion: this morning
...he road constructive materials. Sir, today morning, I read the letter on notice board whic...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 106, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d their services available in our area. As we are working on airport tunnel projec...
^^
Line 11, column 40, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... Moreover, I am able to manage the time also. I can attend the seminars at 1:00 pm d...
^^^^
Line 11, column 102, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
... seminars at 1:00 pm during lunch break.Therefore, it will not affect my working hours. K...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or this training course. Anticipating your prompt reply. Yours faithfully, ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, moreover, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 917.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98369565217 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78298549589 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.701086956522 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6315937863 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.5384615385 76.5299724578 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1538461538 16.8248392259 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120805620913 0.216113520407 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440009606029 0.0766984524023 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492442436468 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0522086950414 0.12726935374 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470550141085 0.0580467560999 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 8.37731958763 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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