You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is notyour original language. You have a friend who speaks this new languageperfectly. Write to your friend,Explaining why you want to learn this new languageAsking him / her for sugge

Essay topics:

You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is not

your original language. You have a friend who speaks this new language

perfectly. Write to your friend,

Explaining why you want to learn this new language

Asking him / her for suggestions on who to learn more quickly

Proposing that you meet your friend to talk about these steps

Dear Tom,

I hope you're doing well and I'm sorry I've not written for so long. I'm writing about my interest in

learning Chinese in which you're highly proficient.

The main underlying reason that I want to be able to acquire Chinese is that this language is the

most sough-after one in the oil industry which I work in. This is because Chinese manufacturers

are the most internationally acclaimed players in the market, and if I have a good command of

their native tongue, I can have an advantage and find jobs with higher salaries.

Actually, I want you to let me know how I can learn this language at a higher pace. Is there any

book or specific dictionary that can facilitate the language acquisition process for me? Should l

enroll in any class that helps me during this process?

I have an idea you might like. Let's meet up next week in the downtown and pay a visit to the china

town located a stone's throw away from the university at which you study. Not only can we have

some traditional dishes of the Chinese restaurants that are there and enjoy their local cuisine, but

also we can have a talk about the methods that you're going to suggest.

Do keep in touch and let me know what you think. Thank you for your help.

All the best,

Shima

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
Dear Tom, I hope youre doing well and Im sorry Ive not written...
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...Dear Tom, I hope youre doing well and Im sorry Ive not written for so long. Im w...
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... I hope youre doing well and Im sorry Ive not written for so long. Im writing abo...
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Suggestion: I'm
...d Im sorry Ive not written for so long. Im writing about my interest in learning...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Learning
...long. Im writing about my interest in learning Chinese in which youre highly proficien...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
...interest in learning Chinese in which youre highly proficient. The main underlyin...
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Suggestion: Most
... Chinese is that this language is the most sough-after one in the oil industry whi...
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...rket, and if I have a good command of their native tongue, I can have an advantage ...
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Suggestion: Book
...nguage at a higher pace. Is there any book or specific dictionary that can facilit...
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Suggestion: Enroll
... acquisition process for me? Should l enroll in any class that helps me during this ...
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Line 21, column 32, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ocess? I have an idea you might like. Lets meet up next week in the downtown and p...
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Suggestion: Town
...downtown and pay a visit to the china town located a stones throw away from the un...
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Line 23, column 14, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a stone' or simply 'stones'?
Suggestion: a stone; stones
...pay a visit to the china town located a stones throw away from the university at which...
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Suggestion: Also
...re and enjoy their local cuisine, but also we can have a talk about the methods th...
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Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...re and enjoy their local cuisine, but also we can have a talk about the methods th...
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Line 27, column 48, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
... can have a talk about the methods that youre going to suggest. Do keep in touch an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1054.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 231.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56277056277 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43610271296 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 127.690721649 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614718614719 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6377084307 44.8134815571 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0769230769 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7692307692 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.53846153846 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 14.0 4.29896907216 326% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 2.54639175258 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255860326461 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945788526017 0.0766984524023 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643624703205 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.083897164008 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055613316799 0.0580467560999 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.