You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events organizer Write a letter to the training organizer Expressing your interest in the role Requesting more i

Dear Mr James,

I am a student of the one-month french intensive training programme and I am writing to express my interest in the role of Social event organizer that our head of the course is looking for someone to take up and to request further information about it.

Let me first explain to you about my previous experience in this kind of role. During my higher studies in my home country, I used to participate in event organizing activities, fundraising campaigns and several other social works for my university. In addition to that, ever since I have moved to the UK, I have been continuously participating in voluntary activities that are being offered by regional charitable organizations.

Furthermore, I believe this role will definitely offer me a great chance to interact with the management and it will also help me to network with several of the students from other departments. All the above reasons motivated me to apply for this position.

I believe that some of the key details about the role such as the type of work that one has to undertake; duration of the responsibility; the team; etc., have not been shared yet. It would be of great help if you could also share those information.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Your's faithfully,
Akilan Palaniappan

Votes
Average: 7.9 (2 votes)

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...y regional charitable organizations. Furthermore, I believe this role will de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, look, so, as to, in addition, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1088.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92307692308 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94184468567 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62443438914 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.6494687683 44.8134815571 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 4.34317383033 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233819543841 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744163311267 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762897069652 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113539765059 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102337506588 0.0580467560999 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.