You play sport e g football for a local team You recently heard that a player in your team is in a hospital Write a letter to your team mate In your letter Say how you feel about the news Ask about the treatment in the hospital Suggest some ways of cheeri

Essay topics:

You play sport (e.g. football) for a local team. You recently heard that a player in your team is in a hospital. Write a letter to your team-mate. In your letter:
– Say how you feel about the news
– Ask about the treatment in the hospital
– Suggest some ways of cheering him/her up

Dear Jot,
How are you now? I recently got news that you met with an accident. I just thought to write to you to enquire about your health.
I got a call from our football coach Mr. Greg and he told me that you slipped from the stairs. He also informed me that you are hospitalized in PGI hospital because you got a fracture in your right leg. I am extremely sorry that the time you need me I am not there to help you out and really feeling helpless and sad.
What about the treatment? Are you getting medication properly? We all know PGI is known for its services, even though I want to know from you whether you are treated well or not. Coach told me that you are shifted to special care awards so that you can recover fast. My cousin Anna is working in PGI and I have called her to tell you about you she will be coming to you in the evening if you anything just let her know she will always be there to help you.
I have some good news for you, firstly, owing to your performance in the last week’s match you have been selected as our captain which means you would be lead our team from now. Apart from this, you have cracked the exam which we gave last month for the scholarship it means you got the scholarship of $2200.
I will be coming this Sunday as I am very eager to meet you. Please take care of yourself.
Best Wishes,
Kinu

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e to you to enquire about your health. I got a call from our football coach Mr. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, so, well, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 64.0 32.9175257732 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1085.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 263.0 206.0 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.12547528517 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.07822418041 2.54303337028 82% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562737642586 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 324.0 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.41237113402 85% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9409219691 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.8125 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4375 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358120001033 0.216113520407 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12762596438 0.0766984524023 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757048362277 0.0603063233224 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20902337821 0.12726935374 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852222771138 0.0580467560999 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 8.37731958763 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 89.08 70.7449484536 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.38 8.71597938144 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.35 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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