You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:• Explain why you&

Essay topics:

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:

• Explain why you're interested in the tour.

• Ask for information about dates and prices.

• Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear sir,

I saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in The Great Himalayan National Park. I am very excited to saw you planing to go there for a week, I have been looking for trekking in Himalayas since long. The Great Himalayan National Park is a fabulous place for nature lovers like me and this place is very mesmerize trekking routes. The main reason of my interest for this trip because last time i missed out, when i went to Manali due to lack of time.

I would like to ask information about the exact dates and prices for this tour. Although i have no issues about budget but it will give me the idea of expenditure. I have one concern about my fitness level can you please tell me what kind of trekking you are offering. I slipped of the wet turf one month ago and my right leg injured however the injury was not much serious but doctor advised me to take rest for couple weeks. Now you please suggest me can i go with you on this tour. I will look forward to hear from you soon.

Thank you
Prabhjot

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...nterest for this trip because last time i missed out, when i went to Manali due t...
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Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ip because last time i missed out, when i went to Manali due to lack of time. ...
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Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...le weeks. Now you please suggest me can i go with you on this tour. I will look f...
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Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...h you on this tour. I will look forward to hear from you soon. Thank you Prabhjot
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, look, so, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 828.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24615384615 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.16980655509 2.54303337028 85% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620512820513 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6674741058 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2727272727 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 4.34317383033 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286855032515 0.216113520407 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121093942519 0.0766984524023 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852544947564 0.0603063233224 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207520781507 0.12726935374 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183610426685 0.0580467560999 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.07 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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