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Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join..explain about the trip.. explain why your brother couldn't make it.. giving details about the trip.

Essay topics: Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join.
.explain about the trip.
. explain why your brother couldn't make it.
. giving details about the trip.

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Dear James,
I am writing to invite you for seven days trip to goa in next month as my brother would not be able to make this due to his railway job.

Let me explain you my situation in detail. Though, this trip was planned 2 months ago with mutual understanding of me and my younger brother, however, yesterday he came to know that one inspection from railway ministry would be on triages in the same week. In addition, I had also paid non-refundable advance money to the Grand hotel in Goa, which is nearly half the amount of total booking. Overall, in fact, I am left with no choice in that scenario. This is why I asked you to join me as you are also like brother to me. Moreover, its have been a long time that I met you.

Would you join me on the trip? The flight tickets are booked on 13th november in evening. Therefore, you need to join me on 12th november on my place. Also, take some winter clothes as there would be chilly atmosphere.

I hope you will join me on this trip.

Regards,
Vinod Chauhan

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 1615.20841683 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 193.0 315.596192385 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31088082902 5.12529762239 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33658650606 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647668393782 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 506.74238477 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.088627472 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.0 106.682146367 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.8461538462 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248300972476 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985230656207 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950506118831 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18032432607 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299151215074 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 13.0946893788 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 50.2224549098 165% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 11.3001002004 46% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 12.4159519038 57% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 78.4519038076 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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