In recent decades, the improvement of medical care leads to an increase in life expectancy and longer life. There are some pros and contras whether it will give added value to the human races or it would give drawbacks. I believe that the increase in medical care leads to the emerging other problem.
To begin with, the improvement of medical care creates the sustainment of the human population. This is good news because human races are one step away from extinction. Due to the fact that improving medical care will invent new technology that will produce a new curing system such as medicines and vaccines, the number of people's diseases can be cured with this treatment. In addition, the most highlighted issue such as stunning which is mal-nutrition for children under the age of five can be solved to increase the number of productive people in the world. For instance, In Indonesia, the number of stunning children was about 50% and this number was decreased since the invention of a new technology in medical care to supply the children with supplement medicine and vitamins.
On the other hand, the increase in life expectancy and live longer means that the population will rise-up. Consequently, the other issue will emerge such as readiness of free space, food supply, and balancing between mortality and birth rate. For instance, In Japan, the improvement of technology in the medical sector brings to the increase of lifespan for people who live in. However, the free space in Japan is limitless, so that it cannot accommodate a dense population at a certain number. Furthermore, It also affects to the expensive living allowance.
In conclusion, medical care will generate more lifespan. However, It does not solve the problem because other issues will emerge such as free space and living allowance. This is why the positive impact is not greater than the negative one.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01904761905 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67729175781 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1111993199 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8125 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269078699042 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974362873412 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853965872775 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16906820953 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432562906585 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01904761905 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67729175781 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1111993199 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8125 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269078699042 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974362873412 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853965872775 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16906820953 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432562906585 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.