Some people consider that school education should be concentrated on academic subjects which would be helpful for their future careers and subjects like music and sport are not useful To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people consider that school education should be concentrated on academic subjects, which would be helpful for their future careers, and subjects like music and sport are not useful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is some argued the sports subjects should be removed from the school curriculum. While I disagree with this view because the benefits benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks.
Obviously, there are compelling reasons make people assert that sports training are not necessary in school education. Firstly, I agree that nowadays have many fitness clubs, physical courses in community for everyone, and therefore students can allow themselves to choose what kind of activities they want instead of do the certain exercises or limited exercises in school.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits of physical training are more significant that the possible drawbacks. sports have an important role to play in improving educational outcomes. Indeed, many studies have found that playing sports can help with brain development, increase energy, and then have a productive study time, as a result people have outperform learning. From a social point of view, schoolchildren may develop closer connection with peers, and improve social skills as they play team sports like soccer, so during the sports time at school students can have enjoyable experiences with their peers and learn how to work together as a team.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the sport subjects can create more potential benefits in education

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Average: 7.8 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1116.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 210.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31428571429 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71502078601 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.652380952381 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.2137071427 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8888888889 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20203932128 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880405257901 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797779471802 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131324183044 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451474064499 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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