Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is certainly true that sports stars get an extremely income which is much higher than other professionals. Some people think that it is justified for them because they have to practice very hard and exhibit their extraordinary talents in competitions. However, some people argue that it is not fair for other who work much harder and dedicate themselves in work. Both of these views will be discussed further.

On the one hand, it is right for sports professionals to deserve a high salary and a huge prize. Enormous talents and disciplined practice are required to achieve in this fiel...

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it is not fair for other who work much harder
it is not fair for others who work much harder

will be able to success
will be able to succeed

follow many strict rules and patient
follow many strict rules and patience

All of these points support the ideal that
All of these points support the idea that

They have to work hard on develop student’s skills and updated their knowledge for teaching.
Description: 'They', 'their' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronoun.

for some careers who work harder than sports athlete
for some people who work harder than sports athlete

Sentence: They have to work hard on develop student's skills and updated their knowledge for teaching.
Description: The token on is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to on and develop

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2

Be sensitive to use pronouns, like 'they'.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1804 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.558 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.311 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.51 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5