The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010

How many Australian people (in percentages), male and female, did a common physical activity split by age group during 2010 is illustrated by the diagram. It is immediately apparent that Australian women showed their relative superiority over Australian men in the percentage of those who carried on physical activity in 2010. In addition, not only did the figure for Australian men witness a descending trend but Australian women experienced the same pattern as well.

Regarding Australian men did physical activity in 2010, it is clearly seen that there was a decline between 15 to 24 group and over 65 group. This was started at 52.8 -the greatest proportion of Australian men figure-, witnessing a significant drop to 39.5 for 35 to 44 group and then rose to 46.7 in the oldest data, which had a smaller percentage than the youngest ones.

Turning to Australian women, they took physical activity less than men in the first group (15 to 24), which accounted at 47.7. The period, however, saw a noticeable growth for the number of taking physical activity at 53 in 55 to 64 group before tailing off 47.1 -a larger percentage than men held on the oldest group in this statistical data.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: '-the the greatest'.
Suggestion: -the the greatest
...over 65 group. This was started at 52.8 -the greatest proportion of Australian men figure-, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, then, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 988.0 1615.20841683 61% => OK
No of words: 202.0 315.596192385 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89108910891 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76429189405 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 176.041082164 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60396039604 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.6379787543 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.666666667 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 20.7667163134 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432735945454 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.235532386075 0.084324248473 279% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881706978886 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302764941198 0.151304729494 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985873198992 0.056905535591 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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