Children brought up in families with less money are better prepared for life than those from wealthy families To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

Children brought up in families with less money are better prepared for life than those from wealthy families.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that children growing up in poor families are more well-prepared for life than those from wealthy families. However, while I agree that kids brought up in families with less money will join the school of life earlier, I believe that those from families with high income can receive better education.

To begin with, being raised in a poor background will give children a broad view of families' economic state. They are soon aware of their responsibility to help with the household chores. As children grow older, they may be given choice to go out for part-time jobs, which makes a contribution to the family's income. Kids are nurtured the wise money spending at an early stage of life since they get to know hard work deserves right money. Moreover, when children apply for secondary school or higher education, they might make the best of their ability to receive the scholarship for the studying period to relieve the family's financial burden.

Despite these possible advantages, it is undeniable that those brought up in high-income families have opportunities to study with advanced education systems. Many parents make a decision to send their children abroad over developed countries like the USA, Australia with an aim to helping them experience various cultures and become self-reliant as well. Also, wealthy families can offer their children with latest technique required for outdoor activities, which promotes their healthy lifestyle.

Given this argument, my opinion is that children from wealthy families are better prepared for life than those from families with less money as what wealthy families provide can works to the advantage of the child. Having said that, poor children may also take their background conditions as a motivation on the path to success.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to right'
Suggestion: to right
...nce they get to know hard work deserves right money. Moreover, when children apply fo...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
...althy families can offer their children with latest technique required for outdoor activiti...
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Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'work'
Suggestion: work
...ey as what wealthy families provide can works to the advantage of the child. Having s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21034482759 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60594992848 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596551724138 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3073246876 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.916666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443062021249 0.244688304435 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165195587723 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141213726111 0.0667982634062 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312040536141 0.151304729494 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140265939694 0.056905535591 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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