In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Lacking of education in rural areas is the serious problem which many undeveloped countries have faced now adays. Many people believe that this issue can be addressed by providing computer and internet connection, I argue that providing more school and teachers is the better options to minimize this problem.
On one hand, it is beneficial for remote children to use computer in order to access morden education due to some reasons. Firstly, these devices allow children to learn lessons without going to school which traditional method learning can not do. For example, accessing internet enables children to self study at home to reach their courses instead of going for a long distant to school especially in remote places where student may take three to five hours for tired of walking to get their school such as in Vietnam mountainous areas. In addition, internet approach is useful tool for rural student to reach higher education which they can not have in the past. Children are likely to obtain enormous sources of information and materials in the internet for free. For example, learning English in rural community is a definitely imposible for native teenagers. However, they can achieve this knowledge throughout many valuable website such as youtube, leanenglish.com and the like.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that the effort of teachers can make a great valuable contribution to educate rural children. First and foremost, many children are illireracy because the limited of school in those areas. Therefore, it is necessary to open school and teachers in order to help numerous uneducated children to pursue education. Futhermore, encouraging children’s parent to allow their child going to school, teachers can raise local community perception on lessing poverty by educaion. In short, this method not only help children reduction poverty but also to meet high level of job requirement.
In conclusion, although rural children can not achieve the latest education without helping from technology, it seems to me that proving more school and teachers is more important for rural places .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, may, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in short, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1785.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29673590504 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7427184442 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551928783383 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4616906398 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283676306325 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931179096793 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698119494457 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185012161667 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713884988794 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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