Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities To what extent do you agree o

Nowadays, supermalls are growing worldwide due to its elegant environment. Some people believe that owing to the extension of mall culture, the local business would die and as a result local community, while I don’t find any valid justification in these arguments. A deep insight of this is described in below paragraphs.

There are few reasons why people choose supermalls over local markets. People prefer a hygienic and sophisticated environment over crowdie and traditional places to shop. Due to this change in preference, consumers turn to supermarkets where they could get all quality products they want at one place.

Some people argue that this causes closure of local shops and in turn local community. There are some grounds to valid their thinking. The first point to make is that, most of the malls sell international goods, so local goods would not be the first choice for the citizens which causes severe harm to the local business. For example, the popularity of the labels like Nike and Adidas has put locally made clothes on extinction. The second point to make is that, this extinction of local business could increase unemployment. People would leave the region and deport to seek the employment which might cause the death of local community. For example, in India, workers of handmade cloths have changed their occupation due to an introduction of the big brands. Thus, opponents of mall culture believe an establishment of the supermarket is the main reason behind disturbance in the society.

However, I believe that market does not directly relate to society or culture. There are many bases of my view. Firstly, traditional goods could be sold in the malls which can increase the sell which means proliferation of the traditional business. As a prime example, Indian “Banarasi Saree” has become so famous that westerners also order it. Secondly, these markets require many employees to cater for the needs of the visitors which could increase the opportunity. For example, each town in India has D-mart having at least a hundred employees working in each. Finally, any community does not fully depend on the shopping centers. For instance, there are many places like community centers and club which could keep traditional society to live. Thus, it would be an overstatement to say that supermall kills local business and local community.

To sum up it all, although the spread of large markets could impact small business, it does not mean the complete death of the regional business or local culture.

Votes
Average: 6.4 (9 votes)

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'at least', 'for example', 'for instance', 'as a result', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257446808511 0.247107183377 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.142553191489 0.155533422707 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102127659574 0.0946595960268 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0382978723404 0.0501214627716 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0255319148936 0.0437548338989 58% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110638297872 0.122226691241 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0212765957447 0.0403226058552 53% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75854680777 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0340425531915 0.0326793684256 104% => OK
Particles: 0.00212765957447 0.00163938923432 130% => OK
Determiners: 0.104255319149 0.0861772015684 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0255319148936 0.021408717616 119% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0170212765957 0.011925033212 143% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2558.0 1933.35771543 132% => OK
No of words: 415.0 316.048096192 131% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16385542169 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.20517956788 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346987951807 0.374742101984 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260240963855 0.28420135186 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.2 0.203846283523 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127710843373 0.137316102897 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75854680777 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.037074148 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53734939759 0.56093040696 96% => OK
Word variations: 61.4735741132 60.7387585426 101% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0891783567 149% => OK
Sentence length: 17.2916666667 20.7743622355 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1247115715 49.517814964 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.583333333 127.492653851 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2916666667 20.7743622355 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.814263465372 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 43.3157630522 49.1944974215 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.88659793814 1.69124875643 112% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.548847581042 0.332605444948 165% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0798814138551 0.102741220458 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0639985183541 0.0668466124924 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.455326043979 0.534860350844 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.1930787639 0.148594505496 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182848978841 0.134430193775 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108788109125 0.0742795772207 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.295995298903 0.324371583561 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.144388542965 0.0638462369009 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.352014410279 0.228012699653 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110587503606 0.058150111329 190% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.41683366733 263% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.5751503006 311% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 1.9629258517 357% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 10.4468937876 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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