It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views

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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In areas like music or sport, many people hold a common belief that some individuals have inherited talents to be good athletes or musicians. However, others dispute that any child can become an excellent profession in sport or music field through proper instructions. In my view, talents are not that important in developing a successful career in sport or music areas, instead, it is the efforts a person makes and the opportunity he or she seizes that count.

Some people contend that many individuals do have specific sport or music talents, which help them to be masters in these fields. For example, African people are good at long distance running. Most Olympic golden medals for running contests have been won by them. Many researches have been done and it is well know now by the public that African people have more powerful muscles, which others don't have , with their legs. This discovery demonstrates that they have a born advantage, which is the strong muscles, and it helps them run faster and longer.

However, others may opine that there are also many examples which state that continuous practice matters in developing successful athletes or musicians. For example, Bruno Mars and Lady Gaga, two of the most popular singers in the world, didn't gain too much reputation in their early years. However, they have been sticking to their music faith and practicing relentlessly. Finally, they become famous musicians with scads of followers.

In my own perspective, both opportunities and personal efforts are crucial for individuals to become successful in their own careers. For example, Yao Ming, the most influential basketball player in China, had devoted himself to basketball. Also, he was lucky to have the chance to play in the NBA after several years' professional career in Shanghai Sharks, a basketball team in Shanghai. Therefore, I believe that personal devotion to specific areas and the opportunity he or she has are more significant than talents.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14241486068 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68535369132 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572755417957 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6891418186 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.8125 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287791451564 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896974231003 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626223128119 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163456988729 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700535573674 0.056905535591 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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