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many animals are becoming extint because of human activities . why is this happening and what should be done.

Essay topics: many animals are becoming extint because of human activities . why is this happening and what should be done.

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In this era of latest technology, there are a lot of drastic changes in universe. It has been seen recently that many species of animals are seen less and less everyday. These huge changes in universe equelibrium are believed to be as a result of human inventions. There are many reasons for this big change. This essay will elaborate some well seen causes with reasonable solutions.
Firstly , one of the obvious reason of depletion of wild life is pollution. With the tremendous rise of population and industrialization there are negative impacts on animal kingdom. There is loss of forests and not enough space for animals to survive. For example, it is noticed that cities are connected and there is no free land for animals. This issue can be solved by the development of proper city plans. There should be promotion of development of green belt area. This way there will be more survival of animals.
Secondly, one of other reason for extinction of many animals is use of firearms and weapons. In many countries there is no rules for hunting. With the easy availability of firearms many people do hunting without any reason. For example in some countries it is a leisure to hunt deers. Due to this reason there is shortage of different species of deers. For this now in certain countries t
like Canada there is obligation to get license for hunting.This way it is better way to save mother nature.
In conclusion it is strongly recommended to safe animal kingdom. Social media should promote safety of animal life. For a healthy enviorment it is important to stay close of nature.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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In this era of latest technology, there ...
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...ecies of animals are seen less and less everyday. These huge changes in universe equelib...
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...seen causes with reasonable solutions. Firstly , one of the obvious reason of d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82783882784 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71711345458 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.6959594634 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.7619047619 106.682146367 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.0 20.7667163134 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189453969322 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602329082532 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398044719537 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979452802885 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054612414024 0.056905535591 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 13.0946893788 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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