In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people.What do you think may be the reasons for this?What problems might this cause in society?

Essay topics:

In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people.
What do you think may be the reasons for this?
What problems might this cause in society?

Disrespectful to elders is a growing concern in many parts of the world. There are several reasons for this, but I believe that the primary reason is the society changed into a past face world. Due to this disrespect toward to elders, the young children are treating elders as the main income source rather than as a weak human being. In this essay will discuss about the reasons for the growing number of people treat older people without respects and the possible causes which can be resulted from this.
As the society changes into a competitive world, people are busy to take care of themselves and as a result, people are taking less care with the elders. For example, in this modern era, people have to compete with a machine as well as each other and that can be mean that the more working hours are inevitable. Lesser hours for being with the family and lesser times being with friends can lead to lesser caring for elders. Therefore, having a less time with elders create the lack of bond between the elders and youth and that can lead to such issue.
In addition to this, as the society develops, people’s demand on their entitlements so increases which inclusive of elder’s pensions and medicine systems. In Australia, for instance, has published the statistics starting that about 5 labours are currently support 1 elder for his pension and health cares and this ratio is continuously increased to 10 labours to 1 elder by 2020. As a result of this, the younger generation can have more financial burdens and they can have a wrong target of blaming the elders for their burdens.
Due to these several reasons, there is a growing issue with young people disrespectful to elders. If this continues, the young generation will be treating the elders as the sources of money flows. In the case of Korea, for example, there are increasing youth crimes related to killing elders to get finances supporting their living standards. Like this, the competitive world has been forcing people to treat elders as the main income sources rather than the societal weak levels.
Moreover, as the more tax burdens have pressured young people, the growing number of elders seeks for an employment as a consequence. In the case of Korea, about 65% of elders are currently employed and 40% of among them have answered their reasons for working as to support themselves without any help from the young generations. However, this is raising the market competition and that pressure onto young workers even more. Therefore, this old employment is worsening the employment market situations.
In conclusion, the fast pace society and the competitive market are the main reasons for the growing issue for disrespecting older people by younger generations despite several other reasons. Due to these reasons, the incremental rate of committing crime by youth and the elderly occupation are inevitable.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253234750462 0.247107183377 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.136783733826 0.155533422707 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0998151571165 0.0946595960268 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0332717190388 0.0501214627716 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0184842883549 0.0437548338989 42% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147874306839 0.122226691241 121% => OK
Participles: 0.0573012939002 0.0403226058552 142% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60215754688 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0314232902033 0.0326793684256 96% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.121996303142 0.0861772015684 142% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0147874306839 0.021408717616 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00369685767098 0.011925033212 31% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2899.0 1933.35771543 150% => OK
No of words: 486.0 316.048096192 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.96502057613 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.20517956788 112% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.374485596708 0.374742101984 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263374485597 0.28420135186 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148148148148 0.203846283523 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100823045267 0.137316102897 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60215754688 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.037074148 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456790123457 0.56093040696 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.8735693975 60.7387585426 85% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0891783567 131% => OK
Sentence length: 23.1428571429 20.7743622355 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.346670262 49.517814964 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.047619048 127.492653851 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7743622355 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.814263465372 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 49.4803057025 49.1944974215 101% => OK
Elegance: 2.43137254902 1.69124875643 144% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27515248172 0.332605444948 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10644988935 0.102741220458 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0529609017147 0.0668466124924 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.592712407008 0.534860350844 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0952945566174 0.148594505496 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128471133835 0.134430193775 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522248765224 0.0742795772207 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.394103452378 0.324371583561 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0430590436626 0.0638462369009 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204641960097 0.228012699653 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528631385551 0.058150111329 91% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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