In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people.What do you think may be the reasons for this?What problems might this cause in society?

Essay topics:

In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people.
What do you think may be the reasons for this?
What problems might this cause in society?

most of countries in the world have many problems regarding respect to older people. The important aspect of this challenge are the globalization and modernization era which diminished social relation among people had affected towards respect less to older people. I hold this view for several reasons which are set out below.

First, I would like to argue that even though the globalization which developed in numerous countries had given more economical benefit and accelerated the expansion of knowledge among them, albeit the globalization also tend to decreased many social-values which have been being believed by society, especially respect from youngest pupils to older people.

On the other hand, the data from Research Centre of Critical education the University of Melbourne showed that the main problem of 50 modern countries in Europe and Asia are the lack of relationship between children and their parents as an implication of modern education system which it refused moral values as its main curriculum.

Third, referring to Austrian Pedagogic Institute stated that the rise of respect less children towards their parents has effected to the increasement the number of broken home, distrust, as well as unsympathetic among them.

Although, some peoples still believe that the main problems of respect less children towards older people due to the growing up of capitalism in numerous countries which it made most of peoples became individuality. However, there is little evidence to support this view.

Taking everything into consideration, I believe that globalization and modernization as the main problems of respect less children towards older people. I hold this view because of globalization gravitate to decreased respect towards older people , modern education system which it refused moral values as its main curriculum, as well as both of globalization and modernization had contributed to the increasement children’s apathy to their parents.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: from the youngest
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, regarding, so, still, third, well, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58278145695 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03105443803 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513245033113 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.597753322 49.4020404114 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 168.6 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183677253615 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986937121992 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057476603103 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103593379072 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791321700278 0.056905535591 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.68 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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