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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle, others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle, others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In this era , it is very obvious that health is a big concerning issue for development of a country. Some people think that healthy life style is a personal choice .on the other hand some people suggest that it should be a concern at government level and state should take responsibility of this issue. This essay will elaborate both aspects of this issue with some examples.

firstly, some people assume that adopting healthy life style should be a personal effort. For example for healthy body weight watching is an important factor. people should watch what they are eating and how they are maintaining their weight. Similarly people who are smoking should know smoking is bad for health .so they should quit smoking. so it is expected from some people that adopting health living style is everyone,s own responsibility.

On the other hand ,some people think that Government should be helping to maintain better lifestyle. For example, for healthy eating there should be proper labels indicating caloric values on eatable items. this way everybody knows what they are eating. similarly government should aware people about bad effects of smoking. Social media should help to aware people about smoking hazards for body. Government should facilitate people for cheap access to gym. Most important is to educate about healthy lifestyle. so it is mostly states responsibilty to take care of healthy living style.

In my opinion both views are important for healthy population. it is very crucial that people should understand importance of healthy living. at the same time government should help people to access these facilities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, similarly, so, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21590909091 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55841264422 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511363636364 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1605219015 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4736842105 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8947368421 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321430395655 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108651001747 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567104723101 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206935942013 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401026022025 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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